I have a best classmate, and she is a mysterious girl. Her name is Selvi Nur Wenda. We study at UHAMKA, and we are on the fifth semester. I always call her Mpi. At the first time I met her, she is very reserved. I thought she is a boring girl. Until at the time, we got an assignment and we must do that in a group. I chose to do it in Selvi's house. At the first time, learning atmosphere is very tense, until Selvi started interacting and could put up a job as well by throwing a funny word. Then the atmosphere was melted and warm conversations were intertwined. After that I know she is a nice and funny girl. Selvi in a campus is very different from her daily life. I had been feeling she is a mysterious girl.
Wow! I think, I am your friend who act as mysterious as Selvi.
BalasHapusDear Nida,
You didn't put comma before the word 'and' in the sentence: "Then the atmosphere was melted and warm conversations were intertwined." ,did you?
I think that's not compound sentence bil, so I didn't put comma in their :(
BalasHapusNice writing. Ya, that's compound noun. Well, dealing with ur TS, I expected that ur writing will be about the reasons why she becomes so mysterious..Er, after reading this, it seems u do not do that. U have to develop ur TS more by adding some supporting sentences with some transition signals. Mind ur consistency in using grammar, punctuation, and the choice of words. Em waiting 4 ur better writing:-)
BalasHapus